Hi Elan, are you kidding? Your English very bad? Come on! You know you're doing a very fine job Guess you just wanted to hear that. A few minor mistakes and a lot of poetic freedom. Not too sure what to make of 'it was a hard war that had gone on too long' in the context or 'her north was clearly lost' (she had lost her orientation?). And you look at 'my own nails' rather than 'mine own nails'.